It was too short and too long.
Had it been condensed a bit, with the needless descriptive paragraphs that had nothing to do with the story removed, it would have been a lot better.
Had the aforementioned paragraphs been replaced with more background on each MC then longer would have been good. The dialogue seemed off. They are in Northern England but their accents are pretty much nonexistent. Also, it was a bit sugary in its loveyness.